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2018-06-06 17:59 来源:未知 作者:admin
北京托福培训 绝对词:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves.(分层参考:学术-精神)
 
(像含有绝对词的题目,最好是采用“替代法”,提出2个跟话题里面一样重要的对象, 分段进行讨论,这样会比你光讨论science development要容易多了)
People make the consensus of pursuing efficient and effective education, but the most important goal of education is an endless debate. Some may say students have to pay most attention to learn self-education. However, according to my perspective,developing science is as vital as self-education.
In(on) an individual level,the development of science can advance their(their指代的是谁??) quality of lives.This is because well-educated people can invent machines to replace labor and thus finishing(改成,thus finishing) simple and repeatable works.And(比起and,用in addition或者furthermore更好) people can avoid some dangerous jobs as well(这里改成被动会更加客观:一些危险的工作能够被避免),like cleaning walls of skycrapers.Meanwhile facilities can fulfill operations which are impossible for human. For instance,people can not(是cannot,说了一百遍了) build a bridge across hundreds of meters several centuries ago.However,engineers creat large machines to load and transport heavy steel and concrete with progressive technology.Therefore, the advancement of people’s daily life(daily life还可以替换成everyday life) is accompanied with science.Teachers are supposed to guide students to devote themselves on exploring science.
From a societal perspective,developing science increases efficiency,since technology can achieve mass production.With wide use of steam machine,social productivity has been largely improved.In addition,the more understanding of science humans secure and the more scientific working methods we can discover(这句话没有谓语啊).For example,the rate of burning fuels of cars was approximate(approximately) 25 percents and burning causes environmental pollution problems,but the emerging electric vehicle completely abandons(应该用替代“replace或者take place of” 或者取代“displace”) fossil fuel and transfers electric energy into mechanical energy at a high degree.So scientific methods contribute to decrease waste and increase(boost更合适) productivity.It is necessary for educators to realize the significance of enhancing technological level.
In terms of a long-term development of human,the betterment of science is indispensable to human sustainability.On the one hand(on one hand和on the other hand是对比转折的意思,不是递进,用错了),natural resources,like water,soil,fuels and space,are limited.Additionally,burgeoning population and pollution burdens the shortage of resources.According to a recent survey from United Nations,at least half of world population will live in areas where can not satisfy water demand in 2025.As a result,it is urgent for human to utilize forefront technology to deal with survival problem.On the other hand,people continuously discover outer space,not only for advanced creatures,but also(加个for 不然不能跟前面构成并列结构) dangers such as radiation and air pressure.If we can find another suitable place,it will be possible for human multiplication.Therefore,we expect science can be developed.
Apparently,educating themselves is also meaningful,because it can promote people to automatically absorb knowledge.People who can educate themselves always have high requirements about themselves,and thus never being(, thus never being) and fashions.They are able to propose helpful suggestions in regard to social issues.So we cannot ignore the significance of teaching students to educate themselves.
Above what has been discussed,it is safe to make the conclusion that educating themselves is not the most important purpose of education.
 
Q:educate themselves 和self-education 是同义吗?

  
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